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Hi everyone,
I’m new and I’m writing a section for my book where a character is Crucified. As this is my first time writing anything crucifixion, I’m in desperate need of help. I will post the story in sections similar to how HB21 does it (my inspo btw, thank you!). If you, the community could be so kind as to give me…constructive criticis, feedbac, ideas how to improve, tips, etc. to make this story better I would be greatly appreciative. I hope you enjoy and don’t hesitate to comment!
Setting: year, 2023 in December, place is a Death Camp.
first section will be posted soon!
ps-im not sure how long 10,000 characters is so…mods, let me know if I go over.
 
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Fang’s Execution: Part 1

Fang had secured the rope which hoisted the small American flag on the large flag pole and looked up, hoping to see any sign that the F-18 fighter jet performing reconnaissance noticed the flag in distress. He saw flares come from the jet before it screamed off, avoiding anti-aircraft missiles from the near by Silencer base. They saw it. They know where not only he, but hundreds of others were. There was a slight feeling of relief as he knew help would soon come.

“You there, slave, halt!” A Silencer yelled, snapping Fang back to the true reality of still being imprisoned. He went to hit Fang with his rifle, but Fang grabbed it and the two wrestled. A few other guards and Silencers came and threw Fang to the ground. Furious, he tried to scramble back to his feet but the guards tackled him and held him down, handcuffing his wrists and shackling his ankles. The slight feeling relief fleeted and in its place as an intense feeling of dread. He was caught red handed and he knew it. Now, he feared that he would not live long enough to escape, that he would die in this hellhole that is Ashgrave Death Camp.

“You filthy Jewish dog!” A guard yelled kicking him in the groin, causing him to double over in pain. The guards holding him by the arms prevent him from falling to the ground completely.

“My brothers will come for me!” Fang snapped through gritted teeth.

“You’ll be dead before they save you,” a Silencer replied. “Take him to the cells below. His master will deal with him.” He was then taken downstairs and shoved into a cell, restraints left in place.

“Come on, I know you saw it,” Fang said to himself. “Get us out of here.” He hoped the pilot would report his findings so that John could quickly rally the remnants of the army. Only time would tell, but time was not on his side.

He heard the heavy iron door down the corridor open then close as footsteps draw near. A Silencer escorting his master approached.

“How could you?!” Mary exclaimed as the Silencer unlocked the cell door. Knowing what his master was capable, Fang tried to scramble into a corner to hide. “Oh, no you don’t. You know what you did! Get back here, now!”

“I-I’m sorry…I…I swear, I won’t do it again…I’m sorry,” Fang stuttered.

“Here!” Mary ordered, snapping and pointing to the ground. He knew he was in deep trouble. “Dog, I said here! Move your ass, you worthless piece of shit.” Fang timidly crawled towards her.

“I won’t do it again,” he murmured quietly. His rough British accent seemed to melt away.

“No, you won’t,” Mary snarled. “Did I not give you privileges above the other slaves? Did I not give you a place to serve by my side? Good food so you could keep up your strength? Have I not treated you fairly? Have I not given you pleasures and gifts? Mercy and tolerance?”

“You have, master, and for that, I am deeply grateful,” Fang replied fearfully. But was he? The pleasures was pleasant for her and nothing but more torture for him. How should he feel grateful for the gift of pain?

“And yet, this is how you thank me for my kindness. You betray me!” She yelled kicking him in the ribs. He tried to scamper to a corner but the Silencer dragged him back by the chains. “You’re right about one thing, you’ll never do it again.”

“I’m sorry, master, please, forgive me, I have done wrong,” Fang asked.

“No. We are beyond that now. It’s time I treat you like I should’ve in the first place. A worthless piece of property,” Mary said and stormed out.

Olivia had guessed where they took her brother, and wanted to talk to him. Using her high ranking position, she tried to make up an excuse for seeing him. A guard refused to let her in, even after the excuse that she needed to interrogate him, which normally worked, failed. She resulted to a bribery attempt with a good sum of money but that also failed.

“I’m sorry, ma’am, we have orders to transfer him to the isolation cells,” the guard stated.

“What? What for? What does that mean? Who ordered that?” Olivia asked alarmed. She was shocked that the guard, whom both she and Fang had become allies with, refused to give her information. The guard looked around. He was nervous, not wanting to show he had been secretly helping the two, yet still trying to balance his duties. Olivia stuffed a wad of cash into his hand. “Answer the questions.”

“Normally, when a prisoner is transferred to the isolation cells, they’re…executed the next morning,” the guard answered.

“No!” Olivia’s response seemed to have slipped out. She heard the clanking of chains down the cell corridor and saw three Silencers leading their prisoner. Realizing it was her brother, she tried to rush to him, but the guard grabbed her. “Fang! Fang, fight! Fight back! They’re going to kill you!” As they passed, Fang cast a glance at her.

“Run,” he could barely mutter. A Silencer hit him in the face,

“What are you looking at?!” He yelled.

“Fang!” Olivia shrieked as they disappeared behind the iron door.

A guard opened a cell and assisted in taking the restraints off. They secured his wrists to the wall above his head, forcing him to stay in an awkward stress position. They leave the shackles with only a few lengths of chain on his ankles. One guard placed something on the cell door before leaving. And thus, for the second time in his life, he sat on death row, awaiting his execution. He doubted that the governor would call and save him this time. He knew there would be serious consequences, thus reluctantly resigning himself to whatever may come the next morning. He knew he would not taste freedom ever again in this world.
 
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ps-im not sure how long 10,000 characters is so…mods, let me know if I go over.
The website wil tell you if you go further than the character limit, which I think is actually 20000 characters.

That was 5615 characters for information, and I think that's a good start! :)

I put a space between paragraphs, it makes it look less like a solid block of text which can be discouraging to potential readers. ;)
 
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Fang’s Execution: Part 2

Olivia was on her way to the officer’s barracks when an enlisted Silencer stopped her.

“I was told to deliver this to you,” he said, handing her a sealed envelope. Though, she did not hold one of the highest ranks, she was still respected enough by the higher ups to have the privilege of being in the know on nearly all topics, proof that she successfully kept her cover of secretly getting information for her brother to help with his war effort. She went up the stairs and after making herself some coffee, she went into her dorm. After a few sips, she opened the envelope and what she read horrified her.


Form 14-E
Warrant of Execution for a Sentence of Death

On this 11th day of December 2023…

I, Mary Okwaho, with the approval of Commandant Jason Howards, is authorized by Black Queen, to sentence to death Prisoner D-662084/Slave 422118 on the charge(s) of treason, inciting rebellion, and many other grievous crimes committed against the Organization of World Legislation and her partners.

This form is to authorize and require a sentence of death be carried out on the 12th day of December 2023, at the time, 0730 in the morning and at location KF-001. The method of execution not to be stated on this form has been presented and approved appropriate for the charge(s) by Black Queen.

Upon execution of this warrant and confirmation of the death of Prisoner D-662084/Slave 422118, the presiding medical doctor is to record time of death and submit Form No. 15 along with a copy of this Form No. 14-E to headquarters. A witness of the execution is required, and must return this form with an endorsement certifying that the sentence has been executed according to the method approved.

Signed,

Mary Grace Okwaho



Witness #1 Witness #2

Tara Kristina Phoenix Jason Hughes Howards

Olivia shuddered as the paper fell from her shaking hands to the floor. Her brother, whom she only recently reunited with, was to be executed the next morning. She had gained his hard earned trust and walked through hell with him, even when the family turned their back. Tears began falling. Did she miss something? Did she say anything to unintentionally incriminate him? Had she sent him to his death? She hoped his death would be quick and painless, but deep inside, she knew it would not be so. But no matter what, she would be with him until his last breath.

It was all up to Fang. The other alters had gone silent, partially by his request and also out of fear. No one else could front if he got overwhelmed, but that was his job in the system. Having Raven blended helped the situation. Now, he could handle it on his own with no constant yapping. Due to the uncomfortable position, he was only able to sleep a couple of hours. The iron door echoed down the corridor of cells and he knew it was time. His game plan was to offer no resistance until absolutely necessary…if it was necessary. A Silencer looked at the clipboard that was placed on the cell door.

“Prisoner ID,” the Silencer said.

“D-662084,” Fang replied. The Silencer pulled out a pin and signed a paper, then flipping it over. “Proceed.” He left while a group of Silencers and guards entered. They released his wrists and his legs gave out for the moment.

“Get all the rest you can, you’re gonna need it,” A Silencer advised before the guards forced him to his feet. They removed the shackles from around his ankles and with their arm looped around his, escorted him out of the cell.

They entered the yard where disciplinary actions are taken when slaves need punishment or conditioning would take place. Fang’s eyes met with his master’s, glaring at him ferociously. In addition, Jason, the Commandant of the camp and ex-President of the United States; Tara, another second-in-command; and the leader of OWL, the Black Queen were present. They tied his wrists with rope and secured them to a beam above his head. The secured his ankles to the side posts, partially spreading his legs. He was barely able to touch the ground, therefore, resigning himself to hang by the wrists. Mary walked up and slipped her hand on the inside of his thigh underneath his loincloth then grabbed his testicles. Hs shuttered, feeling her icy hand between his legs. She gently messages them then suddenly yanked up, causing his neck to arch back and a loud grunt.

“I don’t want to do this for you,” she said. “You were a good slave. It’s such a shame your usefulness was so short.” She undid the clasp to his loincloth and it gradually fell to his feet with the help of gravity. He was now exposed and naked, his sex dangling between his legs. What he failed to realize was that Tara and Jason moved behind him and removed the cat o’ nine tails whip from their belts.

“You are perhaps the fittest of them all,” the Black Queen mused, feeling his still muscular arms down to his chest. “You should last a few days, three at least. I can’t wait to watch you dance!” He knew what was coming. The way she talked to him was a dead give away. Intense fear welled up, but he tried his best not to show it. He was not afraid of pain or death, but hanging for days on end was not his ideal way of dying. She cracked her whip loudly next to his ear making him startle. He felt a leather strips with sharp objects trace his back and the muscles twitched.

“Don’t worry. It won’t be enough to kill you,” Mary said lifting his chin with her whip. She smiled then moved back. A loud cracking noise like thunder pieced the air and a blow landed on Fang’s already horribly flogged and scared back. Only a slight grunt escaped. At the beginning, the four of them took turns whipping and beating him with their fists. The scourge tore his flesh, ripping muscle as well. They soon sporadically started landing blows of various kinds. The silent and stoic warrior was soon groaning and soon crying out at every blow. He forced his head up, and saw in a window his sister’s face looking at him.

“Why didn’t you run?” He grunted quietly to himself before a lash came down on him. He fell unconscious several times only to be revived with a bucket of waste or salt water splashed on him. After forty-five minutes of brutal beatings, the group stopped to gather themselves.

“We do anymore, we’re gonna kill him,” Mary said. Nearly all of his flesh from his chest and back down to the legs was now in ribbons and shreds, his own blood, pooling beneath him. Organs were exposed in some areas as well as bone and muscle. His face, disfigured, his body, completely unrecognizable.

“Will he survive even tonight?” Tara asked.

“Take him down, let him rest,” Mary ordered. The guards removed the handcuffs that were added for extra security halfway through then laid him on the ground. He was drifting in and out of an unsteady consciousness, groaning softly. The gravel stuck to his back, buts coldness felt soothing. Mary knelt next to him and held his hand, speaking deceitfully soothing words to him, hoping to speed up his recovery.

Olivia was sleeping soundly when she jolted awake to a loud crack. Wondering what it was, she went to her window that overlooked the garden. After not seeing anything, she threw on some clothes and went to grab some coffee. That’s when she saw numerous officers gather at the windows watching what was going on. She was terrified, but frozen with fear, she watched the whole ordeal, witnessing the severe flogging and mutilation of her brother.
 
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part 3

Fang had to let the overall shock to his body pass before he could maintain a steady consciousness. His breathing had returned to almost steady, and the four saw he was fit enough.

“Get up, you filthy animal,” Jason ordered.

“Take your time,” Mary cooed mockingly, getting up. Fang wiped the blood from his left eye, the only one that he could see out of since he was blind in the right eye. He had gotten used to it, but still hated the neighbors because they were the reason for it. Damn house fire. After wiping the blood off to clear his vision, he got himself to his hands and knees to try and stand up. He felt someone grab him roughly around the waist and straddling his legs. Desperate, he tried to buck the person off, but he had no strength too and the person had a strong grasp.

“He’s still got some fight in him!” Jason exclaimed. He then forced his hardened penis into Fang and began thrusting, casually at first to make sure it was in. With one arm around the slave’s waist, he grabbed the braided strip of hair and yanked Fang’s head back. He began rapidly thrusting, penetrating the poor victim deeply and roughly. Fang grimaced at each thrust, his body still stinging and dripping blood from the flogging. Pain shot throughout his body as his clawed the ground desperately with his left hand. Jason pulled out right before he started to ejaculate. Still holding Fang by the hair, he walked in front of him and white fluid leapt from his penis onto Fang’s face. The semen stung as it got into Fang’s eyes. “Here’s your war paint, Indian. Now show us the great warrior you claim to be!” He let go of Fang’s hair who tried to hide his face in complete shame, desperate to wipe off the cum, like a dog trying to scratch its face. Never before had he felt so humiliated and dehumanized. Mary whistled and motioned to some Silencers to bring something. Two guards grabbed Fang and brought him up to his knees and held his arms as the two silencers set a heavy beam on his shoulders. The rough hewn wood splintered on his shoulders causing him to cry out in pain.

“Your crossbar, my chief,” a Silencer mocked. They tied his arms securely, despite the sweat and blood making it slippery, wrapping his forearms around the back of the beam for as must stabilization and balancing as possible. The forced him to his feet, and he staggered under its weight. He knew this was the end, his nervous anxiety wanting to get the worst part over. Standing naked and bleeding, brutally raped in front of everyone who could see and watched the spectacle. He hung his head in shame, the proud warrior was gone and in their place stood a frightened boy. Mary walked up to him and fastened his blood soaked loincloth back on.

“You’re so beautiful like this. Your copper skin bleeding red,” she mused. “Mmm…too bad it ended like this. Unfortunately, crimes can’t go unpunished.”

“Finish it already,” Fang stated. Jason had a wooden board with string around it, the same ones used for the slave auction with type word “Treason” written on it.

“Here ya go, one last gift before ya die,” Jason said putting the sign around his neck.

Olivia stood in horror, watching what was happening to her brother. The other officers laughed and began placing bets.

“He won’t last a night!” An officer exclaimed. “I’ll bet you fifty dollars!”

“Nah, he’ll last three days at least,” another stated. “Wanna bet a hundred?”

“Well, I don’t know about everyone else, but I’m going to go down and watch them nail that son of a bitch to the wood. Something about seeing the enemy leader screaming when the nails pierce his skin seems…erotic,” a different one stated. A few others joined him and went down. Olivia wanted to spare herself the trauma of having to watch the whole crucifixion process so she decided to try and clear her thoughts in the garden.

The heavy patibulum dug into the back of his neck and shoulders. In order to try his best and counteract the weight, he had to lean forward slightly. He knew where there crucified the slaves, he was even forced to assist in a crucifixion. Knowing where he was going did not make the walk to his death any easier. He had trouble walking on the muddy gravel path, already slipping several times and falling twice.

“Move faster!” Jason screamed laying a blow to Fang’s torn back. The weight of the patibulum overtook him and he fell again. “Get up, motherfucker! On your goddamned feet!” The beam was weighing him down and pinned him. He wondered if there was a way he could possible break his neck to spare him from the further humiliation that is to come.

“Get him on his feet,” Mary ordered. Two Silencers took forced him to his feet while trying not to sleep in the mud themselves. The weight of the beam was too much for him, but he was still forced to carry it unassisted. When they finally made it to the center of the camp, he saw a group of guards, a few he recognized. It was the execution team. All the slaves were gathered and forced to watch the execution. The prisoners of the camp had grown accustomed to continuous executions and ignored what was going on, but still casting glances. Some of them decided to watch. The main group observing were the guards and Silencers, mocking Fang and placing bets on how long he would last. He realized he was not only being executed, but also used as an example, increasing his humiliation. The slaves were up front while the guards and Silencers were grouped together. He was already exhausted and his execution had not even started yet. The long death march was drawing near the end as he passed by several other tau style crosses. One still held a skeleton of an executed slave and the other three had bodies in various stages of decomposition, the most recent one, nearly three weeks dead. Then at the end, there was the stipe of the one he would be nailed too. Out of either fear or exhaustion at seeing the instrument of his death, possibly both, his legs gave out.

“Not again,” Jason muttered and landed a few blows.

“You’re embarrassing me!” Mary yelled. “Ugh, take it off.” The guards undid the ropes and Fang collapsed to the ground.

“On your feet!” Jason ordered. Fang made no move to get up and two Silencers had to force him up and after walking him in front of the stipe, held him up. The Black Queen stepped up and as loud as she could and yet still be understood, read the death sentence:

“Fang Aaron Okwaho, Chief General of the United States Mohawk Army, you are found guilty on the charges of Treason, Sedition, and many war crimes against OWL and her partners. Such charges warrant the penalty of death. Do you understand the sentence I have just read?” The Black Queen asked. For a moment, Fang started getting angry. Annoyed that he let this happen to himself.

“Yes,” he replied angrily. What war crimes were they talking about? He sure as hell knew that they did not give him a trial or anything close to that. He stomped his foot in the mud showing his anger.

“Easy,” a Silencer warned. “You better watch it.”

“The man before you, the great military general and Chief of the Mohawk Indians, after a fair trial, stands convicted of treason, sedition, and numerous unspeakable war crimes against OWL and her partners. He offers no remorse for his actions. We have no choice but to condemn this man to death using a method appropriate for said and unsaid offenses. A method reserved for the worst of the worst, like him. May this man’s execution be an example to you all not to dare challenge OWL’s sovereign authority. I’m sorry, it grieves me to say this, but you are hereby sentenced to death by crucifixion. To be nailed and hang on the wood until death. May God choose to have mercy on your soul,” the Black Queen exclaimed. Silencers and guards yelled and shouted, some spat at him. They wanted him dead. Fang was now furious, refusing to go down without a fight. He would go kicking and screaming if he had to. “Guards, crucify the prisoner.”

“You’ll pay for this!” Fang shouted resisting the guards. “You can kill me but my brothers will keep fighting you!”

“Shut up!” A guard ordered.

“My people will fight without me!” He yelled.

“Crucify the fucking animal already!” Mary screamed. One of the guards had the brilliant idea of tripping him and dragged him on his shredded back to the patibulum. The whole execution squad had to pin him down while two of them secured his forearms to the beam with rope intertwined with barbed and razor wire. They snuggly wrapped it around his arm, causing the barbs and razors to dig in then finished by wrapping the rest around the arm and beam. Two soldiers were still needed to hold his arms down while one sat on his legs and another straddling his chest to prevent him from bucking.

“You’ll regret this,” Fang seethed. He no longer cared about the the people watching his crucifixion, he wanted to give the enemy one last fight. Mary picked up the box containing the spikes and started going through them, dropping the ones she liked on the ground easily within Fang’s view. When he saw the six inch long nail spike, which was approximately three-quarters of an inch in the thickest diameter, fear crept in again. He would be secured to the crossbeam by spikes through the wrist and feet. His fit of anger turned to desperation, the situation now sinking in. The nails clattered slowly to the ground, one by one as Mary muttered things while going through the box.

“That’s bent at the tip, this looks dull…well, this one’s been used but still looks decent. Huh, still has blood on it too,” she muttered. Simultaneously, she was letting Fang wear himself out. Once she grabbed the four nails to her liking, she tossed four small wooden squares next to them. Fang was panting, trying to gather his strength. “Oh, Fang, you’ve been an intriguing one.” She knelt down next to his left arm with a nail and wooden board in one hand and the other, a mallet. He turned his head and looked up at her.

“Just get it over with, woman,” he snarled. Mary looked down at him with displeasure.

“I’ll make sure your death is as slow and agonizing as possible, you piece of shit!” She exclaimed. She checked the security of his arm, stretched just under full extension at about a thirty degree angle. He tried to wiggle free, but with his head being just under the crossbar, he had no leverage or advantage. Mary looked down at him and smiled. “Yes, your body is still fit and muscular. Such a rare opportunity that we get to put up someone like you, and a Jew no less. Mmm…you’ll do nicely on the cross.” She traced what remnants there were of the Star of David that was branded on his shredded skin. Fang desperately tried to free himself, knowing there was nothing he could do.

“Settle down, slave, you might as well accept your fate,” the Silencer sitting on Fang chest growled. He reached behind him and grasped Fang’s genitalia through his loincloth, ready to crush them with his grasp if Fang begins resisting again.

“Easy, don’t damage the goods just yet,” Mary said.

“Fine,” the Silencer huffed loosening his grip.

“I hope you enjoy pain,” Mary stated with a smile. She began prodding different areas on Fang’s wrist, looking for the optimal spot to place the nail. She put the wooden plank on the chosen area and started tapping the nail in. Fang felt the sharp tip starting to pierce his flesh. Seeing that the nail was in a desirable place, a Silencer held down Fang’s palm and upper forearm. Nothing could prepare him for the he was about to endure. He was trying to steady his breathing and brace himself. The mallet slammed down on the head of the nail driving it partially into his wrist. He let out a gut wrenching yell and squirmed. Mary waited a short moment before landing another blow which drove the spike through his wrist. The two Silencers used all their weight to keep him pinned to the ground. She continued pounding the nail three additional times ensuing it went completely through his wrist and the patibulum. Fang tried to pull his wrist off, but the wood plank acted as a washer. He screamed with the slightest movement of his wrist and Mary walked over to his right wrist and looked at him. His chest was heaving. She waited, giving him a moment to feel the full extent of the pain.
 
Olivia was waking the path of the garden. She knelt down and picked a blood red rose, one of the only flowers in bloom in the dead of the harsh New York winter. She looked at the fragility of the flower, the tips of the pedals wilting. Bringing it up to her nose, she inhaled its scent deeply.

“Ow,” she startled, poking her finger on one of its thorns. In the distance, she heard screaming and faint hammering. She closed her eyes and tried to imagine she was somewhere else, hoping to drown out her brother’s cries of anguish and the guard’s loudly cheering for his death.

“Hey, you’re missing the fun over there,” a Silencer officer stated. “The animal’s screeching like crazy. Never heard him do that before. Imma go watch, wanna come?” Olivia clutched the rose tightly.

“No,” she said.

“Eh, your loss. Most of us are gonna be watching. It’s only once in a lifetime you personally get to witness the execution of the enemy leader. Hope it’s long and painful for him. That’ll be fun to watch,” the Silencer said and walked away.

Fang’s body squirmed on the ground as lightning radiated from his wrists down to his arms. His hands tense and fingers rigid, taking on the appearance of claws. The heads of the nails rested flat on the wooden washer, the spikes impaling the ground underneath.

“Crucify that creature! Hang him up for us to watch him dance!” A Silencer yelled.

“Death to the chief! Death to the chief!” Another exclaimed. Soon, the whole mob of guards and Silencers began chanting. Fang groaned loudly, trying to minimize his movement, thus minimizing his pain. The execution team had gotten off of him and Mary wanted to have some intimacy with him one last time. She then straddled Fang’s body and rubbed her hand against his penis through the loincloth.

“Not now,” Fang begged, trying to manage the pain. She leaned over, pressing her body against his bleeding chest.

“If not now, when?” She asked and began kissing his chest and slightly nibbling on his nipples, still stimulating the slave’s sex. Fang could feel it starting to become firm.

“No…” he grunted then cried out as pain shot through his arms.

“Mmm…you’ll look magnificent on the cross. If only I could feel you inside me one last time,” Mary mused. She leaned forward and using both hands, pinned his shoulders to the ground. His body jerked violently as he shrieked in intolerable pain. “I love seeing you in pain.”

“Get…off!” Fang screamed at her with a grimace.

“Your cock felt so good in my hand. It’s a shame really,” Mary mused, sitting up. She placed her hands on his exposed ribs, digging her nails into his wounds. “Suffer well.”

“Hang him up!” The Black Queen ordered. Two Silencers grabbed each side of the patibulum

“One, two, three,” one counted as they hoisted it up onto their shoulders. Fang shrieked as the weight shifted. The Silencers climbed up the foldable ladders on each side using all their strength. “Alright, on three, get the beam into the notch.”

“Yeah, I know, hurry up!” The other Silencer grunted.

“One, two, three!” The first counted and they hoisted the patibulum above the stipe and settled the beam into the notch. “Is it in?”

“Yeah, let it go,” the other replied. They let go of the beam and it fell into place with a thud. Fang let out a blood curling piercing shriek. His legs were desperately trying to grasp the stipe to remove the weight from his wrists. The guards and other Silencers laughed, mocking him. He managed to grasp the stipe with his feet, lifting himself up, but his legs quickly got tired and slipped. Another scream. His legs dangled freely, all of his weight forced on his wrists.

Having perfected the art of crucifixion like the Romans, the execution team knew that asphyxiation would come quickly. They knew crucifixion was multipurpose, a show for them and an efficient method of execution that made their victim suffer for days before death. Because of this, having the victim hang solely by the wrists was too quick. One guard picked up another nail and wooden plank while another grabbed his leg.

“Bend your leg, prisoner, trust me, it’s for your own good,” the guard stated. Fang was trying his best to relieve the pain on his wrists. “Listen to me, do what I say!” Enduring the pain as much as possible, Fang let his wrists carry his weight as he bent his leg. The guard adjusted it to a slight angle, enough to where he could push himself up to get air but not fully extend himself. He held the leg by the foot and above the ankle, letting the other guard place the wood on the ankle bone and secure it with the nail.

Fang looked down and was relieved that they had left his loincloth on. It made the humiliation slightly more tolerable. Or so he thought. He saw and felt the guard’s cold hands press his leg against the side of the stipe. A light tapping could be heard underneath him of the guard fixing the nail to the wood. Fang could then feel the tip of the nail on his ankle. Suddenly, the guard pounded the head of the nail and everyone present could hear the crack of his ankle bone breaking. He screamed, jerking his leg but between the firm grasp of the guard and the nail, it was pinned into the stipe. There were several more pounds of the mallet, driving the nail deep into the post. Fang’s head careened back, grimacing and shouting in pain. The guard pulled on the leg to double check its security which inflected more excruciating agony. They went over to the opposite and Fang was ordered to bend his leg. He tried to pull himself up by the wrists, but that quickly failed. Again, he had to let himself hang. The guard held the leg firmly to the side of the stipe while the other tapped the nail through the wood. After confirming the correct placement, the guard drove the nail through the ankle bone, firmly securing it to the vertical post. Once checking the leg was secure, the guard let go. Relieved that the nailing had been down, Fang leaned his head back against the stipe, breathing heavily and grunting in excruciating pain. A guard mounted the ladder next to him with a small nail and hammer in hand.

“You gonna…nail my head now?” Fang challenged.

“Heh, very funny,” the guard chuckled sarcastically. He took the sign that hung from around Fang’s neck and pushed his head down. Fang startled when he heard the hammer hitting the nail, securing the sign above his head, letting all who pass by what his crime was. The guard started climbing down and stopped. “You want be needing this anymore.” He grabbed the loincloth and tugged on it a few times until it came loose.

“Hey! You wanna attach the rod while you’re up there? Looks like he’s having a hard time breathing,” the other guard stated from the ground.

“No shit,” Fang grunted. The guard on the ladder slapped him hard across the face. His body jerked causing bouts of extreme agony.

“Yeah, I guess. Don’t think he’ll last long like this,” the first guard replied. The second guard hopped on the ladder with a wooden rod. “Stand up.” Fang tried his best. The guard with the rod forced Fang higher and slipped it between his legs. The other guard nailed it securely. Tossing the hammer to the ground, both of them grabbed Fang and guided him down, ensuring the rod penetrated the rectum. Fang felt the relief in his wrists but was immediately aware of a new source of pain. A third member of the execution team grabbed the mallet thrown on the ground.

“Boss wants you to bend the exposed ends of the nails,” he said to the two. They groaned and hammered the tips of the nails holding his wrists against the bar.

“That look alright?” The guard on Fang’s right yelled.

“Yeah, looks fine,” the guard on the ground replied unenthused. The two got down and threw the ladders to the ground. Despite having some assistance from the rod, he still needed to push up then lower himself for a single breath of air. This caused the wood to rub against his back, making painful splinters and opening deeper wounds. He then tried different positions to find which would make the pain more tolerable. He never found one which forced him to rotate between various positions. Thus, the dance on the cross began. He was crucified.
 
As this is for my book, the next chapter will cover the days he’s on the cross. Please let me know if you want to read that as well. Some may be filler content, but yeah….the five days he’s crucified will be on the next chapter. Let me know if y’all wanna read it.
Any and all suggestions, questions, comments welcome!
Yes , we would like to read it. Perhaps more torment and humiliation from lovely ladies in the crowd?
 
Olivia was waking the path of the garden. She knelt down and picked a blood red rose, one of the only flowers in bloom in the dead of the harsh New York winter. She looked at the fragility of the flower, the tips of the pedals wilting. Bringing it up to her nose, she inhaled its scent deeply.

“Ow,” she startled, poking her finger on one of its thorns. In the distance, she heard screaming and faint hammering. She closed her eyes and tried to imagine she was somewhere else, hoping to drown out her brother’s cries of anguish and the guard’s loudly cheering for his death.

“Hey, you’re missing the fun over there,” a Silencer officer stated. “The animal’s screeching like crazy. Never heard him do that before. Imma go watch, wanna come?” Olivia clutched the rose tightly.

“No,” she said.

“Eh, your loss. Most of us are gonna be watching. It’s only once in a lifetime you personally get to witness the execution of the enemy leader. Hope it’s long and painful for him. That’ll be fun to watch,” the Silencer said and walked away.

Fang’s body squirmed on the ground as lightning radiated from his wrists down to his arms. His hands tense and fingers rigid, taking on the appearance of claws. The heads of the nails rested flat on the wooden washer, the spikes impaling the ground underneath.

“Crucify that creature! Hang him up for us to watch him dance!” A Silencer yelled.

“Death to the chief! Death to the chief!” Another exclaimed. Soon, the whole mob of guards and Silencers began chanting. Fang groaned loudly, trying to minimize his movement, thus minimizing his pain. The execution team had gotten off of him and Mary wanted to have some intimacy with him one last time. She then straddled Fang’s body and rubbed her hand against his penis through the loincloth.

“Not now,” Fang begged, trying to manage the pain. She leaned over, pressing her body against his bleeding chest.

“If not now, when?” She asked and began kissing his chest and slightly nibbling on his nipples, still stimulating the slave’s sex. Fang could feel it starting to become firm.

“No…” he grunted then cried out as pain shot through his arms.

“Mmm…you’ll look magnificent on the cross. If only I could feel you inside me one last time,” Mary mused. She leaned forward and using both hands, pinned his shoulders to the ground. His body jerked violently as he shrieked in intolerable pain. “I love seeing you in pain.”

“Get…off!” Fang screamed at her with a grimace.

“Your cock felt so good in my hand. It’s a shame really,” Mary mused, sitting up. She placed her hands on his exposed ribs, digging her nails into his wounds. “Suffer well.”

“Hang him up!” The Black Queen ordered. Two Silencers grabbed each side of the patibulum

“One, two, three,” one counted as they hoisted it up onto their shoulders. Fang shrieked as the weight shifted. The Silencers climbed up the foldable ladders on each side using all their strength. “Alright, on three, get the beam into the notch.”

“Yeah, I know, hurry up!” The other Silencer grunted.

“One, two, three!” The first counted and they hoisted the patibulum above the stipe and settled the beam into the notch. “Is it in?”

“Yeah, let it go,” the other replied. They let go of the beam and it fell into place with a thud. Fang let out a blood curling piercing shriek. His legs were desperately trying to grasp the stipe to remove the weight from his wrists. The guards and other Silencers laughed, mocking him. He managed to grasp the stipe with his feet, lifting himself up, but his legs quickly got tired and slipped. Another scream. His legs dangled freely, all of his weight forced on his wrists.

Having perfected the art of crucifixion like the Romans, the execution team knew that asphyxiation would come quickly. They knew crucifixion was multipurpose, a show for them and an efficient method of execution that made their victim suffer for days before death. Because of this, having the victim hang solely by the wrists was too quick. One guard picked up another nail and wooden plank while another grabbed his leg.

“Bend your leg, prisoner, trust me, it’s for your own good,” the guard stated. Fang was trying his best to relieve the pain on his wrists. “Listen to me, do what I say!” Enduring the pain as much as possible, Fang let his wrists carry his weight as he bent his leg. The guard adjusted it to a slight angle, enough to where he could push himself up to get air but not fully extend himself. He held the leg by the foot and above the ankle, letting the other guard place the wood on the ankle bone and secure it with the nail.

Fang looked down and was relieved that they had left his loincloth on. It made the humiliation slightly more tolerable. Or so he thought. He saw and felt the guard’s cold hands press his leg against the side of the stipe. A light tapping could be heard underneath him of the guard fixing the nail to the wood. Fang could then feel the tip of the nail on his ankle. Suddenly, the guard pounded the head of the nail and everyone present could hear the crack of his ankle bone breaking. He screamed, jerking his leg but between the firm grasp of the guard and the nail, it was pinned into the stipe. There were several more pounds of the mallet, driving the nail deep into the post. Fang’s head careened back, grimacing and shouting in pain. The guard pulled on the leg to double check its security which inflected more excruciating agony. They went over to the opposite and Fang was ordered to bend his leg. He tried to pull himself up by the wrists, but that quickly failed. Again, he had to let himself hang. The guard held the leg firmly to the side of the stipe while the other tapped the nail through the wood. After confirming the correct placement, the guard drove the nail through the ankle bone, firmly securing it to the vertical post. Once checking the leg was secure, the guard let go. Relieved that the nailing had been down, Fang leaned his head back against the stipe, breathing heavily and grunting in excruciating pain. A guard mounted the ladder next to him with a small nail and hammer in hand.

“You gonna…nail my head now?” Fang challenged.

“Heh, very funny,” the guard chuckled sarcastically. He took the sign that hung from around Fang’s neck and pushed his head down. Fang startled when he heard the hammer hitting the nail, securing the sign above his head, letting all who pass by what his crime was. The guard started climbing down and stopped. “You want be needing this anymore.” He grabbed the loincloth and tugged on it a few times until it came loose.

“Hey! You wanna attach the rod while you’re up there? Looks like he’s having a hard time breathing,” the other guard stated from the ground.

“No shit,” Fang grunted. The guard on the ladder slapped him hard across the face. His body jerked causing bouts of extreme agony.

“Yeah, I guess. Don’t think he’ll last long like this,” the first guard replied. The second guard hopped on the ladder with a wooden rod. “Stand up.” Fang tried his best. The guard with the rod forced Fang higher and slipped it between his legs. The other guard nailed it securely. Tossing the hammer to the ground, both of them grabbed Fang and guided him down, ensuring the rod penetrated the rectum. Fang felt the relief in his wrists but was immediately aware of a new source of pain. A third member of the execution team grabbed the mallet thrown on the ground.

“Boss wants you to bend the exposed ends of the nails,” he said to the two. They groaned and hammered the tips of the nails holding his wrists against the bar.

“That look alright?” The guard on Fang’s right yelled.

“Yeah, looks fine,” the guard on the ground replied unenthused. The two got down and threw the ladders to the ground. Despite having some assistance from the rod, he still needed to push up then lower himself for a single breath of air. This caused the wood to rub against his back, making painful splinters and opening deeper wounds. He then tried different positions to find which would make the pain more tolerable. He never found one which forced him to rotate between various positions. Thus, the dance on the cross began. He was crucified.
Thank you for writing this, but I want to understand it or have it explained to me, perhaps due to a bad translation the text was distorted. Question: When Fang bends his leg to be nailed in the ankle, do the soldiers do the hammering process partially so they can check that the leg position is correct? And when they locate the correct position of the leg, do they move the leg to another point on the wood to finish hammering? And then he moves on to nail the other foot.
 
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