How come Eul gets the bum deal, after all she's been through???
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How come Eul gets the bum deal, after all she's been through???
(That's loathometer-ese for
)
Repertor
Artifex Imaginum
It was a wonderful story, Eul. It has everything a good story needs to have and I enjoyed it very much.
I also liked the style you were using; very short episodes, mostly with a cliffhanger at the end. It reads very easy.
I remember how your whip-strip fantasy inspired me to make a picture, which in turn induced you to write this story.
"The idea's so simple, quite silly really, but it's got me excited
enough to be dreaming up a story around it -
just sketching a few ideas, it'll take a little while,
but those pics help stimulate my imagination."
It didn't last long before you came with a story. And it became so much more than just the whip-strip. It became an elaborate story with many twists and turns, so much longer and more complex than originally indended.
Although it was clear that the story was near its ending the end came rather unexpected.
At first it looked like a happy ending until the very last sentences revealed an open ending. Slavegirl Eulalia has become a secret agent. What does that imply? We can only guess.
We know very little of Șifr. Perhaps he is not that bad at all. Who knows? Eul will soon find out.
I also liked the style you were using; very short episodes, mostly with a cliffhanger at the end. It reads very easy.
I remember how your whip-strip fantasy inspired me to make a picture, which in turn induced you to write this story.
"The idea's so simple, quite silly really, but it's got me excited
enough to be dreaming up a story around it -
just sketching a few ideas, it'll take a little while,
but those pics help stimulate my imagination."
It didn't last long before you came with a story. And it became so much more than just the whip-strip. It became an elaborate story with many twists and turns, so much longer and more complex than originally indended.
Although it was clear that the story was near its ending the end came rather unexpected.
At first it looked like a happy ending until the very last sentences revealed an open ending. Slavegirl Eulalia has become a secret agent. What does that imply? We can only guess.
We know very little of Șifr. Perhaps he is not that bad at all. Who knows? Eul will soon find out.
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Uh-huh, no way, Eul! Take a break from the story but if you intend to leave us hang you will discover the wrath of Joan Tree!!!Well, that's it for now - at least, I'm not planning to take it any further for the present,
it's already about ten times longer than I thought it would be.
As we storytellers here know from experience,
characters can take on a life of their own and you just have to run to keep up with them!
I've enjoyed writing it, and thankyou to everyone for lots of helpful comments,
which have quite often tweaked the way I've developed the plot.
Of course, it's an ending that leaves a lot open - slavegirl/ secret agent Eul's
unlikely to have a quiet life ahead of her...
The best-laid plans of the cunning Begum Raghida seem all too likely to gang agley,
with unpredicatble consequences for her troupe of slavegirls,
her alliance with the bluff General Aziz (an officer and a gentleman,
who fucks his slave-women and thrashes their brats with the whip)
may not be fated to last very long...
only Allah knows
(though Șifr's no doubt keeping an eye on Him too)
Eul goes on to become one of Sifr's most successful secret agents. Seeming to be only a humble slave, her deep cover is invaluable for...
Perhaps another day. That's my take anyway.
Splendid, Eul. I truly enjoyed every minute, and your masterful handling of all the complex intrigue.
Superb!!
Perhaps another day. That's my take anyway.
Splendid, Eul. I truly enjoyed every minute, and your masterful handling of all the complex intrigue.
Superb!!
old slave
FELIS RESPICIENS
The harsh reality of a slave-girl's existance...........
...........which Eul101 understands full well.
I like this uncertain future; what ever is planned, it looks like Eul101 will be an individual, probably expected to make decisions, treated as important ----------- rare opportunities for a kāfirah slavegirl.
Thanks for all those comments everyone 
Yes, I wanted a 'happy-ish' ending, not tragic (though the number of bodies by the end wouldn't be a bad count for a Jacobean tragedy),
nor a 'happy ever after' comedy ending, that just wouldn't have suited the scenario, but one with a bit of ambivalence,
as much could be hoped for by the resourceful females who've been coping with a world run by men, all of them brutal and some more or less crazy -
the Begum herself has come through by dint of cunning and ruthlessness, but of course her future's by no means bombproof
(literally or otherwise), being senior slaves in the Begum's household is likely to be a precarious existence for Yasmin, Sima, Turi and Lau,
and being a kāfirah in the service of Șifr and his Secret Police will certainly be a high-risk role for Eul.
Yes, I wanted a 'happy-ish' ending, not tragic (though the number of bodies by the end wouldn't be a bad count for a Jacobean tragedy),
nor a 'happy ever after' comedy ending, that just wouldn't have suited the scenario, but one with a bit of ambivalence,
as much could be hoped for by the resourceful females who've been coping with a world run by men, all of them brutal and some more or less crazy -
the Begum herself has come through by dint of cunning and ruthlessness, but of course her future's by no means bombproof
(literally or otherwise), being senior slaves in the Begum's household is likely to be a precarious existence for Yasmin, Sima, Turi and Lau,
and being a kāfirah in the service of Șifr and his Secret Police will certainly be a high-risk role for Eul.
Could be a whole new thread, in fact. Just saying...and being a kāfirah in the service of Șifr and his Secret Police will certainly be a high-risk role for Eul.
bobinder
ARTISAN
Please accept my belated congratulations on an excellent story, Eul. We have enjoyed -
An excellent tale of high-powered political intrigue, told from the perspective of the slavegirl who is used and abused by the forces which dictate her destiny. The Islamic State of Inglistan is presented convincingly, as an alternative reality with a descriptive flair evocative of the author's knowledge of an English town once known as Oxford.
Woven into this familiar backdrop is a climacteric series of events, presented with engaging detail and emotive description. The plot builds and takes the reader on a white-knuckle, rollercoaster ride with unpredictable twists, following the ups and downs of the dependable Slavegirl Eul's misfortunes.
She remains philosophical throughout her daunting, even life-threatening experiences, whilst expressing genuine concern for the companions who share her trials and become her friends. The relationships of all the characters are presented with a sensitivity appropriate to their human nature. This is a classic exploration of the strength of the human will.
The frequent appearances of the mysterious grey-haired man, Șifr, provide a sinister continuum. Ultimately he has the last word, and that word defines the protagonist and her future - 'Come with me, slave.'
An excellent tale of high-powered political intrigue, told from the perspective of the slavegirl who is used and abused by the forces which dictate her destiny. The Islamic State of Inglistan is presented convincingly, as an alternative reality with a descriptive flair evocative of the author's knowledge of an English town once known as Oxford.
Woven into this familiar backdrop is a climacteric series of events, presented with engaging detail and emotive description. The plot builds and takes the reader on a white-knuckle, rollercoaster ride with unpredictable twists, following the ups and downs of the dependable Slavegirl Eul's misfortunes.
She remains philosophical throughout her daunting, even life-threatening experiences, whilst expressing genuine concern for the companions who share her trials and become her friends. The relationships of all the characters are presented with a sensitivity appropriate to their human nature. This is a classic exploration of the strength of the human will.
The frequent appearances of the mysterious grey-haired man, Șifr, provide a sinister continuum. Ultimately he has the last word, and that word defines the protagonist and her future - 'Come with me, slave.'
d'Not
Executioner
"medium-weight rough crocodile hide"
Yikes!
Well, take heart ... at least it's not the "heavy-duty rough crocodile hide"
The grasp of detail is where fantasy excels, within the wide panorama of violence, degradation, and depravity, the source, texture, and preparation of a tool is integral to the happening.
At least its surface is not embedded with teeth and bits of bone of the same crocodile.
d'Not
Executioner
thanks for those encouraging comments, all of them -
I'm conscious ....
It's good that quite a number of friends here are following and enjoying
my (more or less) daily morsels, I feel like I'm playing Scheherazade!
Scheherazade indeed, with this the fiction ends and the fantasy is explained. As a teller of fairy tales, you are among the very best. Up there with the likes of Scheherazade.
d'Not
Executioner
Yet another tension builder!
I love imagining what those guard uniforms are like, and the over the top elegance of the passageways and doors.
" ... we three slavegirls kneel in deep prostration, our hands clasped behind our backs, our faces pressed into the softness of the deep-pile carpet that still holds scents of wool from the mountains and exotic dyestuffs ..."
Not good for anyone with allergies! ... I wonder what the penalty for suddenly sneezing might be
guessing not a Benadryl and a tissue
d'Not
Executioner
"Otherwise we’ll just go barking crazy"... that segment will make some readers go barking crazy!
Arf! Arf!
d'Not
Executioner
Wragg - Is this anything like physicians today? for example: After he does the finger up the ass thing, he wants to biopsy your prostate for CANCER. He does that and sends the samples to the lab.Begum Raghida has had the opposite effect!
(That's a negative loathometer reading, Repertor. Is it supposed to do that?
Shortly he rings you up and says the lab results are "Positive". In doctoresse, with regards to CANCER, positive is bad, negative is good. Probably the same logic by which dentist number your teeth top to bottom, left to right. Number 1 is the wisdom tooth that they pulled 50 years ago and it was right up there near your right ear. Left is right.
d'Not
Executioner
Witch Hunts are best when the interrogators have decided the conclusion before they start the question. Torturer works if the script is well planned.
d'Not
Executioner
Prince Uday intervenes, for once asking a reasonably intelligent question
"for once" ????????
What ever happened to intelligent statesmen and rulers?
Madam, is it possible that you can ask the second question with a straight face given the current 'statesmen and rulers' running around loose in today's world especially in any state, blue or red?