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Lovestellio
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Nice, nice work! keep going!
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The False Prophetess
- Thread starter _CADRE_
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_CADRE_
Magistrate
Thanks for the feedback. For some reason it uploads them out of order sometimes. That’s why I labeled them with page numbers
xso
Tribune
The pictures and story are stunning! Love it!
EmperadorAzteca
Condemned
In this chapter what I expected happened, with Leila betraying her followers, for the next chapter I think another betrayal is coming, on the part of the magistrate.
_CADRE_
Magistrate
We shall see
Crux-Emperor Baracus X
Rectidolor
Good pics,such cute loincloths.... 
Fatcathockey
Condemned
I love the story and renderings. I especially enjoy the ethnic variety in the ladies.
it would be a nice twist that the Goddess is forced to nail her followers to the cross herself. Then in a cruel twist of fate they inform her that now she’ll be crucified as well.
look forward to more. Excellent work
it would be a nice twist that the Goddess is forced to nail her followers to the cross herself. Then in a cruel twist of fate they inform her that now she’ll be crucified as well.
look forward to more. Excellent work
SkinnyCrux
Magistrate
German version so far: Done.
xso
Tribune
Love this story!
Hangnail
Tribune
Brilliant work. Proofreading comments:
13: "while they fed on deceased parents food" -> "while they fed on her deceased parents' food"
14: "a scouring" -> "a scourging"
19: "collected my disciples" -> "arrested my disciples"
25: "prohpetess" -> "prophetess"
"manace" -> "menace"
"a tattered garb" -> "tattered garb" (garb is a mass noun like "clothing")
or "a tattered <name of garment>" e.g. "shift", "chemise", etc
27, 28, 40, 47: "Golgatha" -> "Golgotha"
39: "you're wrists"-> "your wrists"
40: "The men took great effort" -> "The men made a great effort"
or "The men made great efforts"
or "The men took great pains"
42: Aurelia's facial expression should be more contorted and angry given what she is saying
13: "while they fed on deceased parents food" -> "while they fed on her deceased parents' food"
14: "a scouring" -> "a scourging"
19: "collected my disciples" -> "arrested my disciples"
25: "prohpetess" -> "prophetess"
"manace" -> "menace"
"a tattered garb" -> "tattered garb" (garb is a mass noun like "clothing")
or "a tattered <name of garment>" e.g. "shift", "chemise", etc
27, 28, 40, 47: "Golgatha" -> "Golgotha"
39: "you're wrists"-> "your wrists"
40: "The men took great effort" -> "The men made a great effort"
or "The men made great efforts"
or "The men took great pains"
42: Aurelia's facial expression should be more contorted and angry given what she is saying
Yupar
Regina Iudaeorum
_CADRE_
Magistrate
Thank you - please critiqueOMG..her choice is not as i expected. :O
Such a great story<3
_CADRE_
Magistrate
Thank you very much for these! This is just what I was looking for. #13 does sound like cannibalism if I re-read it lol
Yupar
Regina Iudaeorum
If me, my choice will be let them free and I'm gonna suffer alone as i always used to be in my stories and fantasy but I respect your story line. And the renders and story are nicely worked together
And this outfit is magnificent.
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Quiet Paul
Tribune
I love this story, and the fabulous images. The twisting of the biblical crucifixion is brilliant and really erotic. And those recen images of processon to Golgotha and wonderful. Can’t wait to see how this develops.Via Dolorosa... Next block of renders...