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BARACUS: The Ordeal.A.D.41.

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EPISODE XI: Betrayal.... 20180810_194615.jpg

As another night inexorably passes...
A new morning begins,yet again !!
Am I hallucinating,what's this I see ??
I observe a figure clad in luxury Silk...
My mistress,the Domina Lady Zena...

I'm overjoyed to see her,hope at last !!
But,her face it's not very friendly...
Opposite me she stands,looking up
Shakes her head ,expressing distaste
Her next words cut,like a hot knife ...!!

"Oh,look at YOU (!!)" She sneers scornfully
"Once you were high and mighty,hah,pfftt !!
Now you're higher up...on a Cross !!
Dying,with complete and utter indignities
Branded lower than a base Slave..!! *spits*

An expression of disgust,unconcealed.,
She moves nearer...reaches out to me,
Grabs my sore Penis,twists painfully !!
"See,how do you like it.Baracus ??
Pathetic,impotent thing,just like YOU !!"

I cry out in bitter pain,urge her to stop !!
"Did you ever wonder,how this came to be ??
Well my master I've got news for you,yes...
I'm not sorry, darling (!!)...it was ME !!
Oh yes indeed I, Zena, betrayed you all !!"

I'm appalled, shocked disbelieving...
Could this be happening,Is it true ??
My mistress, the Domina Lady Zena
Has somehow condemned me to this,
Fated to perish horribly, on the Cross..!!

"WHY??" I barely manage to croak
A voice filled with heartbreak, despair
So much anguish and desperation...
"This cannot be true,your confession
Please I ask you,why did you do this ?!"

"Oh,Baracus,let me enlighten you...(!!)
Do you recall,a few years ago,by now...
That Egyptian Slave,Nekhmet,you killed
Wrongly accused of theft,and crucified ??
Well,he was my exotic Lover...my toy-boy!!"

"Hateful,I bade my time I'd waited...
After that failed uprising,in the Senate,
Once the Emperor had recovered,vengeful
The time was ripe,indeed,upon reward...
I sacrificed you,perfect revenge,my payback."

"Now at last I've got my justice indeed
Truly I'm satisfied,that you've got yours !!
I'm a happy woman,rich and free....
You're a dying man,an insignificant Slave,
Farewell,Baracus,was nice knowing YOU(!!)"

She turns away, haughty proud, laughing...
I call her back to me,beseeching,tearful
"Please have pity,I beg you,Zena PLEASE !!
Genuinely, I did not even know,no,NO !!"
Ignoring my pleas,She walks away,forever.

I sob,I curse I'm screaming in bitter pain
My voice is racked with emotion
I look upwards,"By the Gods I beg you
Let me fucking die...please,oh,please !!
WHY this terrible torment...,hey WHY ?!"

I'm now weakened by the ordeal
I need succour,I plead with the Guards
"Please let me drink,my thirst torments !!"
A sponge proffered,raised to lips,I gag...
Vinegar mixed with dubious liquid,vile !!

I continue to sweat,piss and moan feebly
Struggle for a foothold,I'm slipping
Breathing getting harder,tighter useless
Dying in AGONY, I'm weak tingling...fading
My head slumps,death is near,so near...

Well,I died,in disgrace,a worthless criminal
Unfairly betrayed by a woman scorned
My whole life destroyed beyond repair..
I'd watched others expire,legs broken,burnt
Kept me until last,a tragic lonely end,I died...

FINIS....
 
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Baracus said:
EPISODE XI: Betrayal....
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Baracus, one advice : dump the bitch!
But I am afraid it is too late!

Baracus said:
Now you're higher up...on a Cross !!
Dying,with complete and utter indignities
Branded lower than a base Slave..!!
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Fallen down by being moved up! Grabs the essential of the story!

Well written, an original way to edit the story and a nice, sour twist at the end!:clapping::clapping::clapping:
 
Baracus said:
Sadly their ordeal takes it's toll
Weaker ones thrown overboard
Left to drown, whilst in chains
Death for them is a blessed relief.
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Given the costs of chain and the vastness of the Mediterranean, it seems a waste not to save the chain for later use. If the slave floats, it dies of thirst in less than three days. Three minutes to drown or three days of thirst. Why loose the chain and rush the relief?

It's a question, not a criticism. A well told story.
 
d'Not said:
Given the costs of chain and the vastness of the Mediterranean, it seems a waste not to save the chain for later use. If the slave floats, it dies of thirst in less than three days. Three minutes to drown or three days of thirst. Why loose the chain and rush the relief?

It's a question, not a criticism. A well told story.
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d'Not said:
Given the costs of chain and the vastness of the Mediterranean, it seems a waste not to save the chain for later use. If the slave floats, it dies of thirst in less than three days. Three minutes to drown or three days of thirst. Why loose the chain and rush the relief?

It's a question, not a criticism. A well told story.
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Yeah I totally get your point.
l wanted the slaves to drown horribly, restricted by chains. oops and thanks !!
 
Baracus said:
As regular readers will notice that Episode l ("Trubunal") doesn't have an accompanying picture :(:( and sods law being what it is
... I find THIS....!! Can anyone help to allow me to edit it postscript ?? Or is it beyond editing ?? Gracias.
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I recognise him! It's Barbria Moria's husband!. A wicked opportunistic political turncoat that survives all emperor changes, and a terrible mercyless guy! When you see this, all that's left for you is four nails!:eeek::eeek::eeek:
 
Baracus said:
EPILOGUE : Aftermath... View attachment 611671

On the Cross,a body slumped,spent...
Naked,pathetic lifeless,now deceased
Crowds shuffle past,apathy,another Corpse
Titulus crudely engraved in Latin reads,
BARACUS PRODITOR AVE CAESAR....

The End......
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Well done baracus , but what is the signification of " PRODITOR" ?

:clapping::clapping::clapping:
 
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